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Many people living in cities these days do not get enough physical exercise. What are the causes of this? What are some possible solutions?

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In
this
 contemporary world, myriad people in urban areas are not engaged in sports an activity, which leads them to
health
 issues.
This
 essay will explore how job routines and new technology impact individual fitness, and
also
 how through provide facilities for exercise
activities
 in job places and reducing spending
time
 on the
internet
 can help to be active and healthy. There are several causes for not indulging in physical exercise.
Firstly
, job timing stuck one to the tasks and after coming home from the office, the tiredness does not allow one to go for walk or gym for any physical activity. As it is compulsory for everyone to fulfil his family’s dreams and needs because for that he must effort full day and cannot manage
hours
 for play
activities
.
For example
, a report published by a japans’ reporter that every person in Japan gets up early in the morning and does their work for eight
hours
 which means their
time
 management is challenging for sports and other
activities
.
Hence
, a substantial working
time
 can be considered a fueling force behind
this
 issue.
Secondly
, apart from work
hours
, modern high tech is
also
 the leading cause of
this
 menace. As the
internet
 attracted folks in the
overall
 world and they get free
hours
, and always surf on the
internet
 which
also
 affects their
health
.
For instance
, a survey conducted in India revealed that more than 85 % of youth spend their daily
time
 on the
Internet
.
Thus
, consistently using technology can be
also
 considered a lack of physical
activities
.
However
, there are certain viable measures that can be taken to curb
this
 issue. The primary solution to
this
 problem I believe would be to provide indoor gyms and other sports facilities in the offices and give the employees a break
time
 which they spend on their
health
 care and individuals should spend
time
 in their physical
activities
 rather than idling their
time
 with Smartphone. In conclusion, spending a lot of
time
 in office work and technology is widespread in
this
 modern era, I believe through the aforementioned solution one can easily get
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyles
  • desk-bound jobs
  • fast-paced urban life
  • conveniences
  • physical exertion
  • barrier
  • densely populated
  • pollution
  • safety concerns
  • urban planning
  • pedestrian areas
  • cycle lanes
  • accessible
  • workplace wellness programs
  • subsidize
  • financial barriers
  • public awareness
  • incorporate
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