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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In today’s world, people are assuming themselves more knowledgeable and trying alternative treatment methods and medicine without referring to doctors.
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 is clearly a negative development like risking our life
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 sometimes taking the wrong treatment or medicine. I think more cons will outperform pros. To commence with, doctors are more experienced and knowledgeable than others. They know which treatment and medicine works effectively but people are risking their life without consulting their doctors.
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, the consumption of the wrong
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 leads to severe well-being conditions.
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 me one cause the death. Once, prescribe the
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 is a safe side to tackle any
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 problems rather than taking
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 on their own.
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, everyone’s body is different in many senses, like there is a difference in diet, exercise, and metabolism,
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 which
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 and treatments do not work sometimes.
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, two individuals suffering from the same
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 problem need different medications and treatments because of variations in the metabolism of the body.
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 can be only understood by the
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 who treats them.
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, sometimes patients unintentionally take over the dose of
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.
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 may cause a major
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-related issue for a long time.
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, good
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 is a gift of God. We must take care of it with proper diet and exercise.
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, some people take a risk and treat their
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 on their own rather than consulting to
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. It is not a good practice of taking pills and treating. The public should be aware of their
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 problems and should prescribe to a
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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