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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In today’s world, people are assuming themselves more knowledgeable and trying alternative treatment methods and medicine without referring to doctors.
This
 is clearly a negative development like risking our life
as well as
 sometimes taking the wrong treatment or medicine. I think more cons will outperform pros. To commence with, doctors are more experienced and knowledgeable than others. They know which treatment and medicine works effectively but people are risking their life without consulting their doctors.
For instance
, the consumption of the wrong
medicines
 leads to severe well-being conditions.
This
 me one cause the death. Once, prescribe the
doctor
 is a safe side to tackle any
health
 problems rather than taking
medicines
 on their own.
Secondly
, everyone’s body is different in many senses, like there is a difference in diet, exercise, and metabolism,
due to
 which
medicines
 and treatments do not work sometimes.
For example
, two individuals suffering from the same
health
 problem need different medications and treatments because of variations in the metabolism of the body.
This
 can be only understood by the
Doctor
 who treats them.
Furthermore
, sometimes patients unintentionally take over the dose of
medicines
.
This
 may cause a major
health
-related issue for a long time.
To conclude
, good
health
 is a gift of God. We must take care of it with proper diet and exercise.
However
, some people take a risk and treat their
health
 on their own rather than consulting to
Doctor
. It is not a good practice of taking pills and treating. The public should be aware of their
health
 problems and should prescribe to a
doctor
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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