The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.
The bar chart provides data on the
number
of international Use synonyms
travelers
from one Eastern country from 1985 to 1995, Change the spelling
travellers
while
the line graph illustrates the percentage of tourists who chose Australia as their destination.
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It is clear that
international tourism was a quite popular hobby during the period and the Linking Words
number
of tourists travelling abroad surged between 1985 and 1995. The figure accounted for roughly 5 million in the first year and increased 3 times Use synonyms
at the end
of the period , Linking Words
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however
there was a slight decrease in 1991Add a comma
,however
,
when the Remove the comma
apply
number
of travelling people dipped by approximately 0,2 million.
Probing Use synonyms
further
, the percentage of Japanese in Australia made up 2 per Linking Words
cent
of the total in 1985 and shew an upward trend. Use synonyms
However
, the figure dropped by almost 1 per Linking Words
cent
in 1989 (from about 5% to nearly 4 per Use synonyms
cent
). Use synonyms
Then
the Linking Words
number
of tourists grew significantly and reached a peak in 1993 (more than 6 per Use synonyms
cent
of the total).
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Overall
, the Linking Words
number
of Japanese travelling abroad increased between 1985 and 1995, Use synonyms
also
Australia became a quite popular region as a tourist destination.Linking Words
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