The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.
The bar chart provides data on the
number
of international travelers
from one Eastern country from 1985 to 1995, Change the spelling
travellers
while
the line graph illustrates the percentage of tourists who chose Australia as their destination.
It is clear that
international tourism was a quite popular hobby during the period and the number
of tourists travelling abroad surged between 1985 and 1995. The figure accounted for roughly 5 million in the first year and increased 3 times at the end
of the period , however
there was a slight decrease in 1991Add a comma
,however
,
when the Remove the comma
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number
of travelling people dipped by approximately 0,2 million.
Probing further
, the percentage of Japanese in Australia made up 2 per cent
of the total in 1985 and shew an upward trend. However
, the figure dropped by almost 1 per cent
in 1989 (from about 5% to nearly 4 per cent
). Then
the number
of tourists grew significantly and reached a peak in 1993 (more than 6 per cent
of the total).
Overall
, the number
of Japanese travelling abroad increased between 1985 and 1995, also
Australia became a quite popular region as a tourist destination.Submitted by mgshetler on
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