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The tendency of people to imitate each other is evident in the popularity of fashionable clothes and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

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Today, everyone wants to catch up to the current
trend
 and become a fashionista. Many individuals keep up with the
trend
 by forging apparel
styles
 and retail goods.
However
, I am an advocate of the opinion that I agree with
this
 to a certain extent only and I shall put forth my arguments in support of my views. Primarily, everyone wants to look and feel great simultaneously
hence
 they want to keep up with the current
trend
. Especially, the younger generation who follow famous
celebrities
 is always eager to try their
styles
 and wardrobe.
This
 makes them feel good and beautiful and they are not fearful of trying any new
styles
 these
celebrities
 pose. The garments to a certain extent are known by brands and
thereafter
 the
celebrities
 who promote these
styles
.
For instance
, Kylie Jenner the famous celebrity known for her beauty products and styling has huge followers who copy her clothing, and
style
 and use the commodities. These
celebrities
 spend on luxurious apparel and commodities which cannot be afforded by many.
Moreover
,
fashion
 is something that keeps changing and
hence
 watching these famous people's attire you could probably keep up with the current
trend
.
Secondly
,
fashion
 is something which is constantly re-created and not every
style
 suits everyone
hence
, one must ensure that their
style
 would enhance their personality.
This
 is the main drawback as many people may not be able to carry that persona with them. Many of them think that just because their
fashion
 icon wore a new
style
 they want to try it on whether it suits them or not.
To conclude
,
fashion
 is something that could be re-created to suit your personality and have a feel-good factor when you wear or use these commodities. People should incorporate new ideas and experiment with new designs.
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