Many people belive that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. what are these problems and how could they be reduced ?

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It is true that most films have

scenes

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having violent

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some problems

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broken psycho can be noticed,I

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assert that some solutions ranging from severe control before watching the film can be used.

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with extra cruelty lead to some problems.First and foremost,after watching something violent,the social skills of a person become

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some

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apply

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danger.

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watching the film about the zombie's invasion

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planet

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,people commence being afraid of any individual they meet.

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this

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mentality

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the mentality

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of a viewer can be broken,which leads to assistance from the side of the doctors.Just like psychopathic people in hospitals.Almost all of them are under some mental trauma.

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,some solutions to the given statement can be used.

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,by strictly controlling every viewer by

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age or mental stability,the person can enjoy watching.

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but not least,it is better to soften every scene in every film for

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better consequences

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,when filming horrors,using less dangerous tools is much safer for all who will see it. In conclusion,no doubt violent

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are dramatic to someone's mental stability.

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,changes

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filming can help viewers to get rid of stress.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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183 words

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Many people belive that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. what are these problems and how could they be reduced ?

Your opinion

In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their friends and their families. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people argue that sending criminals to prison is the best method of dealing with them. However, others believe that education and job training are better way to help them. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It has been suggested that cars and public transport should be banned from city centres and only bicycles be allowed instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?