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Some people believe that the best way to succeed in life is to get higher education/a university degree, while others disagree and say that it is no longer true today. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The issue of high
education
 has always been heatedly debated in society.
According to
 some, it is high
education
 that contributes most to success in life,
while
 others claim that, nowadays, there is no need for a
university
 diploma to succeed. In order to make any conclusion regarding which viewpoint is more reasonable, it is worth discussing both. On the one hand, not only does a
university
education
 provide essential skills and valuable knowledge needed for chosen occupation, but it
also
 broadens students’ minds.
In other words
, students obtain skills in several accompanying subjects.
along with
 major subjects, youngsters study foreign languages, philosophy, psychology and other essential disciplines, that would be of assistance in
further
 life.
Moreover
, certain occupations imply the presence of high
education
,
for example
, scientists, doctors, and teachers.
As a result
, for modern people
university
 degree is an advantage, but not a necessity.
On the other hand
, modern courses offer variable options, that satisfy both students and employers. To be precise, with breakthroughs in information technology students have obtained the opportunity to reduce their terms of study by up to one year or even less. Despite
this
, the curriculum of
such
 courses is intense and implies a lot of homework,
thus
, providing with decent level, highly estimated by hiring managers.
Not to mention
, that people can choose a well-paid manual occupation, which is in demand in the job market.
Therefore
, they could make good money without graduating from
university
. In conclusion, having analyzed the issue, I am firmly convinced that the majority of modern people can effortlessly succeed without high
education
.
However
, for representatives of some occupations, it seems implausible.
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