The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The flow chart delineates how sugar is made from sugar cane.
Overall
, the procedure consists of 7 main steps, commencing with raw materials and finishing with refined sweet substances.
At the first stage
of the process, after 12 to 18 months of being grown, canes are harvested by farmers or machines, after which those are transferred to the refinery. At the factory, raw plants are crushed and squeezed by a strong and giant roller to extract the juice. Next,
in order to get pure and refined products, the juice is purified through a tool called a limestone filter.
The following step is
that the filtered liquid is poured into an evaporator to be heated and boiled until it becomes a thick and sticky syrup which also
contains crystals. To separate crystals from molasses, the mixture is spun in a centrifuge to remove liquid. Finally
, the factory dries and cools down sugar before being packaged and distributed to customers.Submitted by qphuongluong.3112 on
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