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More and more people are eating healthy food and exercise regularly. What are the reasons for that? What can we do to make other people do the same?

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Nowadays,
people
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 are encouraging themselves to consume healthy
food
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 and to do regular
exercise
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. The main factor of
this
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 program is to be healthier and avoid obesity. There are several methods to influence other
people
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, which I will elaborate more on below.
This
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 modern era makes
people
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 being busier than in the past.
This
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 situation demands them to have a lot of energy;
therefore
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, maintaining
an eating
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an eating habit
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habits
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 is a must to be able to survive in their work time.
for example
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, many employees prefer to bring
food
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 from their homes to ensure that they consume healthy
food
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.
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, the increase in obesity rate drives
people
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 to have more
exercise
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. If
this
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 habit is continuously done, it would
be
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not only
having
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have
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 a benefit for health but
also
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people's
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for people's
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 body, which could make them more confident
due to
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 a slim posture. With regards to the method, In
this
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 digital era,
people
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 could share their regular
activity-related
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activity related
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to
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apply
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eating
habits
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 and regular
exercise
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 on their social media platforms,
such
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 as Instagram,
Facebook
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and Facebook
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, which could give a wider impact on society.
People
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 who want to share the programs could do an education purpose for society regarding how important to implement these
habits
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 and there are some risks of avoiding these
habits
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 which could lead to
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a
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health
issue
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.
As a result
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 of
this
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,
people
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 would be more consciously aware to follow the program. In conclusion, In
this
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 era,
people
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 consume more healthy
food
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 and do more
exercise
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due to
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 the workload and being fitter.
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, social media platforms are an effective way to influence other
people
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.
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