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Some people think that job satisfaction is the most important factor when looking for a job. Others think that having job security is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
people
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 encourage themselves to consume healthy
food
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 and
exercise
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 regularly. The main factor of
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 program is to be healthier and avoid obesity. There are several methods to influence other
people
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, which I will elaborate on more below.
This
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 modern era makes
people
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 being busier than in the past.
This
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 situation demands a lot of energy;
therefore
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, maintaining an eating habit is a must to survive in their work time.
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, many employees prefer to bring
food
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 from their
home
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 to ensure they consume healthy
food
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.
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, the increase in obesity rate drives
people
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 to have more
exercise
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. If
this
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 habit is continuously made, it would not only
having
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a
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apply
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benefit
for
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health but
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people
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's
body
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, which could make them more confident
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 a slim posture. Regarding the method, In
this
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 digital era,
people
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 could share their regular activities related to eating habits and regular
exercise
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 on their social media platforms,
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 as Instagram and Facebook, which could give a wider impact on society.
People
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 who want to share the programs could do an education purpose for society regarding how important to implement these habits, and there are some risks of avoiding these habits, which could lead to health issues.
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 of
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,
people
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 would be more consciously aware of following the program. In conclusion, In
this
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 era,
people
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 consume more healthy
food
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 and
exercise
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due to
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 the workload and being fitter.
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, social media platforms are an effective way to influence other
people
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.
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