The table and chart below give information on police budget

The table and chart below give information on police budget
The table represents data about police funding and from what type of sources it came from
additionally
it depicts two pie charts that illustrate composition on how the money was spent from 2017 to 2018.
Overall
,
it is clear that
although
financial support was increased over the period, the salaries of staff decreased.
Firstly
, it can be seen that the National government allocated 2.3 sums more money in the next year compared to the previous,
following
this
local taxes increased their financial aid significantly from 91.2 to 102.3 bank by 11.1-ton pounds.
In addition
, money that came from other sources went up marginally only by 0.5. . 
Secondly
,
according to
the information on the pie ,charts salaries diminished dramatically from 75% to 69% over a year. On the other, hand technologies experienced an upward trend from 8% to 14%.
Lastly
, buildings and transport were stable throughout the term.
Finally
, total funding was risen from 304.7 to 318.6 total pounds by 13.9 lot pounds.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocation
  • budgetary constraints
  • community policing
  • economic conditions
  • expenditures
  • funding allocation
  • governmental policies
  • operational efficiency
  • personnel costs
  • public safety
  • resource allocation
  • revenue sources
  • surveillance technology
  • trend analysis
  • fiscal responsibility
  • capital investments
  • public sector spending
  • crime rate
  • policy reform
  • infrastructure upgrades
  • staff training
  • emergency response capabilities
  • fiscal year
  • financial oversight
  • budget cuts
  • incremental increase
  • law enforcement agencies
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