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Evaluate the impact of technology on the modern business landscape.

There is growing sentiment today related to the importance of
technology
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 in running a
business
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 in modern society.
Technology
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 brings many benefits to
business
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 and I will discuss it in
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 essay.
To begin
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 with,
technology
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 brings global connections quicker and faster than in the past. Information
technology
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 has enabled businesses to attain greater reach. Nowadays,
people
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 can work online, get quick communications or run businesses through emails, text, instant messaging, websites, social media platforms, etc. A counter-example is working from home during the Covid-19 pandemic, communication networks allow
people
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 to work at home, still have some meetings through video calls or meeting apps
such
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 as Zoom, Skype, Teams, etc, and share data and ideas within their department
as well as
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 throughout their organisation.
Technology
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 brings many new experiences, smart tools, etc with the aim of improving the
business
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 environment and making
people
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’s life easier.
Technology
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 can be seen as a helpful
storage
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 for
people
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's life. In the past, if
people
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 want to save data, they will use the traditional method using paper and save it in
storage
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. Nowadays, organisations use cloud
storage
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 to supplement their facilities, which is made possible by cloud
storage
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. Users can remotely upload and view content, and store and retrieve data as needed.
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 is a much more convenient way for organizations to access information. Today, there are many information repositories which are designed to be protected from competitors, hackers and others trying to damage the company. So,
technology
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 provides us with many helpful and safe
storage
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 tools. In conclusion,
technology
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 plays an important role in the
business
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 field. It creates an international market and makes
people
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 closer.
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 that, it
also
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 provides us with smart tools to make
people
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’s life easier.

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