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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The pie charts compare the proportions of three unhealthy nutrients consumed by the average resident in the USA in each meal and in
snacks
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 in a day.
Overall
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,
sodium
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 and saturated fat reveal similar patterns,
whereas
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 added sugar shows a different one.
People
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 in the US consume the largest proportion of
sodium
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 and saturated fat in dinnertime, at 43 and 37% respectively, followed by lunch, both at just under 30%. Regarding
sodium
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, the percentages of breakfast and
snacks
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 in which
people
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 intake it were both the same, representing 14%. In terms of saturated fat, the proportion of
people
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 who intake the kind of fat in
snacks
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 is 21% and in breakfast is 16%. In comparison, added sugar is consumed the most in
snacks
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, which is 42%.
Then
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 the figure is
subsequently
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 followed by dinner and lunch, at 23% and 19% respectively though these are much smaller than the other two nutrients.
By contrast
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, only 16% of
people
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 in the US intake added sugar in breakfast, which shows almost the same share as
sodium
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 and saturated fat, though.
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