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The table and chart below give information on police budget

The table and chart below give information on police budget
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There are two illustrations provided above, which are a table and a pie chart.
While
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 the table presents police capital from 2017 to 2018, the pie chart shows the allocation of the budget. In overview, within a year, the number of capital from all
sources
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 experienced an increase.
However
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, not all proportions of budget allocation showed a marginal rise and fall. First of all, in 2017, the national government contributed no more than 176
million
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 euros to law enforcement.
Moreover
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, local taxes granted roughly 90
million
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 euros and other
sources
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 supplied 38
million
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 euros. It can be seen that the number grew for the next year when more money was spent on the police department. On average, the amount grew to 3
million
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 per source. Moving onto the next illustration, which is how law enforcement spent their capital from the national government, local taxes and other
sources
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. There are 3 major aspects for distributions, namely salaries, technology and buildings and transport. Between 2017 and 2018, they decided to stay consistent with buildings and transport proportion with 17%.
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, technology and salaries faced a rise of 6% and a fall of 6% respectively. In conclusion,
while
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 there was a rose in allowance from the government, taxes and other
sources
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, different situations occurred for the percentage of budget allocation.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocation
  • budgetary constraints
  • community policing
  • economic conditions
  • expenditures
  • funding allocation
  • governmental policies
  • operational efficiency
  • personnel costs
  • public safety
  • resource allocation
  • revenue sources
  • surveillance technology
  • trend analysis
  • fiscal responsibility
  • capital investments
  • public sector spending
  • crime rate
  • policy reform
  • infrastructure upgrades
  • staff training
  • emergency response capabilities
  • fiscal year
  • financial oversight
  • budget cuts
  • incremental increase
  • law enforcement agencies
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