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Some people think tourism should be banned while some disagree. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#people #tourism #disagree
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After transportation became easier and more convenient,
people
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 started travelling around the globe more.
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tourism
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 and hospitality business has been promoted throughout the decades.
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, some
people
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 still find that
tourism
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 should be banned especially after the pandemic in 2020,
whereas
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 another group of
people
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 disagree with that idea.
To begin
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 with, there're two main reasons why
people
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 agree that
tourism
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 should be banned which are crime fear and disease problems. In any
country
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 that tends to be a highly recommended tourist destination, some local
people
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 feel unsafe about millions of foreigners entering the
country
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 daily. There is a possibility that terrorists can be disguised as a tourist as well.
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, terrorists got into many Europe countries and mass murdered innocent
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.
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, in the post-pandemic ,society
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 are more aware of how diseases can spread all over the world by
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 mainly the diseases that are easy to be infected
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 as Covid-19, flu, pox and many more.
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,
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 are more concerned about the dangers tourists can bring .
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 still support
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 to continue
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 the national economic boost and pride in their cultures. With a high inflow of
tourists
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 the
country
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's economy will surely be better: with more income for local businesses. Some touristy countries' economies rely on the
tourism
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 sector, so some
people
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 certainly don't want
tourism
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 to stop. Apart from the financial reason,
people
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 are
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 proud of their culture being visible to the worldwide community. The more tourist comes into the
country
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 the more famous their culture will be.
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,
people
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 still want
tourism
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 to be carried on. In conclusion, Both sides have reasons to support their idea. In my opinion, I find more benefits for every party if
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 is not banned.
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, there are so many more valid points for the former group to against
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. I still find that the possible advantages the
country
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 will be able to gain is more than the possibility of the risks to be concerned about. So,
tourism
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 should not be banned.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural dilution
  • economic dependency
  • economic development
  • cultural exchange
  • conservation efforts
  • responsible tourism
  • sustainable tourism
  • mitigate
  • influx
  • overreliance
  • indigenous populations
  • global economic fluctuations
  • cross-cultural understanding
  • preservation efforts
  • vulnerable
  • revenue
  • habitats
  • endangered species
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