The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
The chart below illustrates the expense of
couple
of states on depletory products in 2010
Change the article
a couple
Overall
, there are six countries in
the list and Change preposition
on
also
three categories of goods. Moreover
, these facilities are such
as food and drinks, clothing and footwear and leisure and education, furthermore
the states compare Add a comma
,furthermore
percentage
of national expenditure among Add an article
the percentage
their
.
Correct the word
theirs
Firstly
, food and drinks have an overwhelming rate in the list so in Ireland approximate
30%, in Italy below Change the word
approximately
a
twenty , in Spain 18.80%, in Sweden just above fifteen and in Turkey about 33%. Correct article usage
apply
However
, clothing and footwear using
less by all countries Wrong verb form
use
such
as Irelan 6.43%, Italy 9
%, Spain Change preposition
at 9
6.51
, Swedeen 5.40% and Turkey Change preposition
at 6.51
6.63
%.
Change preposition
at 6.63
Secondly
, leisure and education unfortunately
Add the comma(s)
, unfortunately,
utilising
third place in the chart Wrong verb form
utilise
although
the Ireland proportion of leisure second place in the list and also
that number is 2.21%. In addition
, Turkey has a significatly
quantity so Correct your spelling
significantly
significant
Correct article usage
the percantage
percantage
is 4.35%, another nation is Italy because there Correct your spelling
percentage
are
a big portion Change the verb form
is
in
there so Change preposition
apply
rate
is 3.20%. Add an article
the rate
At
the Change preposition
In
end
Add a comma
,end
Italy
and Change noun form
Italy's
Sweden
Change noun form
Sweden's
rate
are 3.20% and 3.22% respectively.Change the noun form
rates
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