The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

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The chart below illustrates the expense of

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of states on depletory products in 2010

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, there are six countries

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the list and

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three categories of goods.

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, these facilities are

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as food and drinks, clothing and footwear and leisure and education,

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the states compare

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the percentage

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of national expenditure among

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, food and drinks have an overwhelming rate in the list so in Ireland

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30%, in Italy below

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twenty , in Spain 18.80%, in Sweden just above fifteen and in Turkey about 33%.

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, clothing and footwear

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less by all countries

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as Irelan 6.43%, Italy

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%, Spain

6.51

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at 6.51

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, Swedeen 5.40% and Turkey

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at 6.63

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, leisure and education

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third place in the chart

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the Ireland proportion of leisure second place in the list and

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that number is 2.21%.

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, Turkey has a

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percantage

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is 4.35%, another nation is Italy because there

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a big portion

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there so

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the rate

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is 3.20%.

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the

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Italy

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and

Sweden

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rate

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are 3.20% and 3.22% respectively.

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countries
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consumer spending
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proportions
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