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Living in an apartment instead of a university dormitory has advantages and disadvantages.

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Having the desire to get higher studies,
students
 usually go abroad or to other provinces, where they have to stay either in the universities provided accommodation, or they can find their own private room outside the university campus. Both scenarios have their own pros and cons, I'll discuss them in the upcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, I will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of living in the on-campus arrangement.
While
 staying there, learners must have to comply with disciplines
such
 as following the time to come in, meals schedules, sense of dressing, etcetera. All these things aid them to learn discipline in their lives.
Moreover
, when graduates live together, they have more chances to study together, and they can learn about difficult subjects from their friends
besides
 their lecture times. It will build many skills in them like co-operation, teamwork, and communication which will help them when getting into the real cooperative world for jobs.
However
, some
students
 do night shifts to arrange fees, and they will be restricted to come in defined time
otherwise
 hostel gates will be closed, so the academic dormitory will rule over their independence. On the flip side, if I looked outside the hostel rooms, private living will have several benefits as many
students
 will like to study alone without any disturbances, so if an individual stay alone, it helps them to focus on their studies, and get success in their academic path. They can make their own schedule for studies, meals, and job timings;
hence
, are feel independent to take their own decisions which in-build many skills in them
such
 as strong decision-making skills, can perform independent job roles and so on. Whilst, as they are not under the surveillance of hostel wards, so probably they indulge in wrong activities like drug consumption, and night parties which will make them financially weak, and
also
 put their future career goals at risk. In the end, I would like to wrap up my essay by saying that both in and out-campus living have their own advantages and disadvantages,
however
, I believe that awareness programs should be organised by education institutes, so
therefore
,
students
 are well able to make a comparison between what is wrong and right, so that wherever they live, they can stay on the right track of their life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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