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More and more people are moving from the countrysie to the city. What are some of the problems this can cause? What solutions can you suggest?

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metropolis prove better living standards to those who reside in them. even folk from rural strata
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 approach the
city
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 to improve their status. Owing to it, problems like scarcity of foodstuff
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 population imbalance arise.
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,
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 blunder can be mitigated by some improvement steps;
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 as better placement in countryside areas
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 providing better amenities. to commence with,
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 trend of movement creates a situation of empty or nearly empty buckets of grains
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 the public.
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, thousands of public in India travel to a big
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 in hope of a handsome earning and stress-free life.
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, no one is left behind for irrigation in the village.
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, the food production from fields decreases
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 causing a devastating situation in terms of food. another prominent problem with
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 fashion is when folk march towards the municipality, an imbalance creates in population density.
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, in countries like Russia, crowds generally move to the
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 to earn, or for other purposes for a long time, causing a condition where only a few were left in the village.
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, cities become overcrowded with
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, creating situations more difficult to cater to.
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, I suggest that
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 can be tackled by taking some rational steps.
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, the government ought to create better jobs in rural areas so that
people
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 who move to the
city
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 merely for earning can get a satisfactory option nearby.
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,
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 must understand that they can earn well by applying modern technologies on their farms. it will improve not only their yield in farms but
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 a good source of earning. in conclusion,
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, migration of
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 from villages to cities causes food scarcity, with cities full of
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 as an add-on.
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, it can be handled by improving placement infrastructure
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 advancing tools for agriculture.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanisation
  • Metropolitan
  • Infrastructure
  • Overpopulation
  • Rural-urban migration
  • Sustainability
  • Urban sprawl
  • Public services
  • Housing crisis
  • Traffic congestion
  • Pollution
  • Quality of life
  • Community integration
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