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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit the community and the teenagers as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some people are of
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 in their free time should be made to carry out unrewarded community service.
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both the community and the teenagers.
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 it is nice that young
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engage
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 in voluntary activities in the areas they live in, I feel , they should
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 a token for their services,
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 being that, getting paid will give them a sense of pride,and
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 of achievement,
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 aid development and increases happiness.
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, being paid ,gives youth a sense of pride and achievement, as they feel within themselves that they gave their best to carry out an activity ,a diligently
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 task helps them place value on themselves, as they get to see who they really are and what they can do.
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, it creates room for development as they invest more time into areas they are efficient in
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order to reach their full potential. More so, payment helps in developing useful qualities like teamwork and
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 interaction with others.
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 , if not paid ,an adolescent will want to hurriedly work ,so he can go back to doing other things, may view
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 as fruitless, and vice versa when payment is involved. No matter how little a reward for work is, it instils discipline and brings forth happiness. An adolescent, fully aware that he or she is to receive
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 after a job well done is more like to carry out
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 task efficiently, to be time conscious on days when they have a job, and will do so with happiness .
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,a youth whose duty is to mow the lanes would do so excitedly, knowing compensation for hard work awaits him or her. In conclusion,
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actively and voluntarily participating in community services by teenagers is beneficial .I am of the opinion that the benefit of paying for services rendered outweighs the demerit.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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