Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit the community and the teenagers as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Some people are of
the
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believe
that Replace the word
belief
adolescent
in their free time should be made to carry out unrewarded community service. Fix the agreement mistake
adolescents
This
can impact positively on
both the community and the teenagers. Change preposition
apply
Although
it is nice that young adult
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adults
engage
in voluntary activities in the areas they live in, I feel , they should Change the verb form
engages
be give
a token for their services, Change the verb form
be given
reasons
being that, getting paid will give them a sense of pride,and Correct article usage
the reasons
level
of achievement, Correct article usage
a level
as well as
aid development and increases happiness.
Firstly
, being paid ,gives youth a sense of pride and achievement, as they feel within themselves that they gave their best to carry out an activity ,a diligently complete
task helps them place value on themselves, as they get to see who they really are and what they can do. Wrong verb form
completing
Also
, it creates room for development as they invest more time into areas they are efficient in in
order to reach their full potential. More so, payment helps in developing useful qualities like teamwork and Remove the redundancy
apply
aid
interaction with others. Correct subject-verb agreement
aids
For example
, if not paid ,an adolescent will want to hurriedly work ,so he can go back to doing other things, may view interaction
as fruitless, and vice versa when payment is involved.
No matter how little a reward for work is, it instils discipline and brings forth happiness. An adolescent, fully aware that he or she is to receive Add an article
the interaction
a
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pay
after a job well done is more like to carry out Replace the word
payment
such
task efficiently, to be time conscious on days when they have a job, and will do so with happiness . Add an article
the such
For instance
,a youth whose duty is to mow the lanes would do so excitedly, knowing compensation for hard work awaits him or her.
In conclusion, while
actively and voluntarily participating in community services by teenagers is beneficial .I am of the opinion that the benefit of paying for services rendered outweighs the demerit.Correct word choice
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