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Universities should provide students with the skills they will require in order to succeed at their future jobs. How far do you agree ar disagree with the above opinion?

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Nowadays, it is believed that
universities
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 should provide
students
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 with special
skills
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 so that they can succeed in their
career
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. I strongly agree with
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 agreement but
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 I believe that it is the role of the student to get the extra
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. In
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 essay, I will elaborate on the two points.
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, all
universities
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 will deliver academic materials to all
students
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.
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, it is not only the theoretical areas which are the most important in the working place. Today, employees are looking for candidates who have tactical
skills
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, who are quick at decision making and most of all, who are looking for
students
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 who have good communication and presentation
skills
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.
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, I believe that above the teaching sessions,
universities
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 should prepare the
students
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 to face the real working environment. Often, young graduates when they are being interviewed, it is clearly demonstrated that they have the fear of speaking. So, I believe that interview
skills
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 should be an additional module that should be added in the
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 year of a student at university.
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, presentation
skills
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 which are actually delivered at university are too basic and I believe that
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 module should be more advanced as today, in the working field, young recruits have issues communicating and presenting their work. Inadvertently, I believe that campuses are not solely the ones to put efforts into providing the required
skills
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 to a student.
Students
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 have
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 the responsibility to develop the required
skills
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 by themselves. They have to make research and work towards their individual development which is required in the working area.
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, good manners and politeness are
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 qualities that employers are looking for. So these qualities are not taught at tertiary institutions, but rather at home and as individual development. In conclusion, I believe that
universities
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 should change and focus on the extra
skills
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 that young graduates should have when they reach the working sphere. But, I
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 believe that
students
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 should
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 work on their individual development to face the challenging working world.
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