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the maps below show the indusrial area in the twon of Norbition and planned future development of the sight,summerise the information by selecting and reporting the mai featres and make copmrison where relevant

the maps below show the indusrial area in the twon of Norbition and planned future development of the sight,summerise the information by selecting and reporting the mai featres and make copmrison where relevant
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The maps depict the current Norbition industrial
area
 which is planned to be converted
to
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 a residential
area
.
According to
 the planned future development, all factories will be either demolished or converted
to
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into
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 other buildings. There is
also
 a plan for expansion including a new
round about
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roundabout
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 on the main
road
. Plus, a new
road
 is planned to be built which bring the
area
 closer to the town and makes
construction
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 of new housing possible. Another significant change is a new
road
 which includes a bridge over the river to expand the
area
 and open more space for housing near
to
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apply
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the current
round about
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roundabout
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 and on the other side of the river.
This
also
 requires farmland to be moved
to
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further
 east. Other changes are new facilities for the habitants. These
ranging
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 from a school, a playground, and a medical
center
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 to shops which all are built near
to
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the current
road
 except shops which
is
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are
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 going to be located on the west side of the current
round about
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roundabout
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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