When designing a building, the most important factor is the intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Throughout the world, building infrastructure
are
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growing day by day. some
people
argue
intended
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use is more important than the exterior view. I
moderatly
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moderately
agree with
this
statement because
it's not only make
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it does not only make
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the building more
cost effective
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but
also
it's make
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it makes
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more
convinent
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convenient
.
To begin
with, It's cannot be denied that building appearance might have some
significiant
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significant
advantages.
Firstly
, many country
authoroties
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authorities
built many
marvelous
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buildings
to increase tourism. many tourists are showing interest to visit historical
as well as
modern
buildings
.
For example
,
Dubai
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the Dubai
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government built many attractive
buildings
like "
burj
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khalifa" to
attracts
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tourism.
Secondly
, if
buildings
like shopping malls are unique, more
people's
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people
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are attracted by their places which increases their profits.
for instance
, in Chennai " forum mall" attracts more
people
because of
their
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structure.
However
,
purpose
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the purpose
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of
building
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the building
a building
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are
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the main priority when the building was
design
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designed
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. there
are
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variety
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a variety
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of different types of building
such
as office
building
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buildings
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, schools, hospitals and commercial
buildings
. Every building has
their
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its
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own purpose schools and colleges don't need
a
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attractive outwards.
therefore
, they only focus on their purposes.
For example
, the exteriors of industrial warehouses are usually covered by a layer of cement or even bricks. Most
of
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public
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the public
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and official
buildings
are constructed for special purposes. To illustrate, hospital structures are designed based on regulations which assure their resistance against extreme natural disasters
such
as earthquakes and floods;
as a result
, more strict regulations should be considered in their structural design process ― their appearance is not their architectural priority. In conclusion, the outward views of some
buildings
are a simple architectural element, because in certain cases conceptual appearances have been designed to attract
people
, symbolize a country, or transfer an idea,
whereas
in
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some other
buildings
, the designers focus on structural factors rather than their exterior appearances ― for the sake of building’s intended usage.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • functionality
  • user experience
  • ergonomic
  • productivity
  • safety standards
  • building codes
  • emergency exits
  • ventilation
  • accessibility features
  • sustainability
  • energy-efficient
  • flexibility
  • adaptability
  • multifunctional
  • regulations
  • operational costs
  • environmental impact
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