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Some People prefer to spend their lives doing the same thing and avoiding changes. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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A lot of
people
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 think differently in life because the way they think is the way they are used to
be
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doing something
witch
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which
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 for them is comfortable. Some
people
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 easily adapt to changes and don’t have a problem with it but some
on the other hand
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 don’t like changes at all and prefer to stay the same because they are afraid of changes or are just comfortable the way they are. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 both sides have their ups and downs so let’s talk about them. Let’s start with
people
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 who prefer to avoid
change
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. These
type
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 of
people
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 only avoid
change
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 because they are scared of it or just are more comfortable doing the same thing. Most of the
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this
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 is bad because when
change
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 is necessary
for example
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 they get a promotion at work or they move
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 a new area these
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 of
people
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 will have a very hard
time
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 adapting to it and will feel uncomfortable or out of place for quite some
time
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 before they get used to it again.
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hand
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hand,
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 these
people
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 find peace in routines and they maintain stability completely focusing on the job that they currently have without disruption.
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Also
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 there are those who prefer the complete opposite and think that
change
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 is good.
This
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 is because they can easily adapt to it and have no problem handling
change
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. For the most
part
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part,
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this
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 is a really good thing because these
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 of
people
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 can easily advance themselves not being afraid to reach higher levels in life and they can easily step out of their comfort zone if needed. But
this
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 opinion can often lead to big setbacks and unexpected problems because you might
change
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 when it’s not necessary or good for you. Another thing is that when you constantly
change
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 you don’t focus on one thing and most of the
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 end up doing a lot of
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 but not doing them fully
witch
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which
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 might lead you to end up not doing anything at all. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 both sides have good and bad effects on you. The best solution is to have a little bit of both. Learn
handling
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 and
doing
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do
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 your current job fully but
also
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 be ready to
change
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 when it
will be
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is
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 necessary. Only having one of these abilities
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 no meaning if you can’t learn to adapt to the other as well.

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Consider using more specific examples to support your points. For instance, describe a specific situation where avoiding change was beneficial or detrimental for someone. This will help to make your argument more convincing.
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Work on ensuring that each main point is well-supported and fully explained. This might involve providing more detailed reasoning or adding additional supporting sentences for each point made.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by making sure ideas flow smoothly from one paragraph to the next. Consider using transition words and phrases to ensure a more coherent flow of ideas.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to the clarity of your writing. Reducing minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing will enhance the overall readability of your essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame the discussion effectively.
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Your essay provides a balanced discussion of both sides of the argument, which demonstrates a thorough understanding of the topic.
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The ideas presented in the essay are clear and easy to understand, contributing to the overall comprehensiveness of your response.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • mastery
  • innovation
  • adaptability
  • personal growth
  • resilience
  • hesitancy
  • risk-taking
  • transitions
  • enrichment
  • equilibrium
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