Task 1 - Me: The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1 - Me: The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first pie
chart
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displays the average energy consumption of one house in Australia,
meanwhile
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the second
chart
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illustrates the greenhouse
gas
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is
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emitted from
the
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power utilisation.
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, the majority of energy is used for heating and
water
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heating, but the key factors causing greenhouse
gas
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emissions are
water
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heating and other appliances over the period surveyed. In the first
chart
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, heating consumes the most power, contributing 42%, compared to the second rank of
water
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heating with 30%. The percentage of energy utilisation for other electronics is recorded at 15%, the third highest among
of
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all needs. The
last
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parts are used for lighting and cooling, at 4% and 2% respectively. Regarding
second
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chart
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, the percentage of
gas
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emissions coming from
water
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heating and other appliances
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reported at around 30% for each, the highest figure
over all
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influences.
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, lower ranks are the figures for heating and fridge, contributing every 15%. The rest amount of
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gas
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the gas
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emissions
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lighting and cooling uses are under 10%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, gas, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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