Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Nowadays, a lot of
students
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have to get a job,
while
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studying.
This
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might have many negative consequences,
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as not
able
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to focus on studying or feeling exhausted.
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essay will discuss reasons why
students
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go to
work
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,
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apply
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while
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gaining knowledge at a university and what solution can be made to escape feeling under pressure. First of all, I think that there are a few reasons why
students
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have to
work
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.
Due to
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high university fees, many families cannot afford to pay for their children
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,
this
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is the most common reason. So
that is
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why many
student
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students
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get
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a job for
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the
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ability to pay for their education.
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, a part of
students
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want
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to get some
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or life
experience
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.
The
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work
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experience
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can help in writing a resume, so the chance that you will get a job
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will increase. Many companies want to get employers with some
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,
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your
work
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experience
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would be useful. Personally, I think there are a few solutions to solve
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problem.
Firstly
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, The government should make university and
college's
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college
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fees lower, so more families could afford to pay for education. Because a lot of universities and colleges have quite high prices to study
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there.
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, I think that many schools, universities and colleges should set up some courses to gain more life and
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-needed
experience
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. That would be beneficial for every
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students
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and their future. In conclusion, I want to say that working,
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studying may cause a lot of problems with mental health,
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as burning out and apathy,
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I believe that financial literacy would be helpful in the future for every student.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial necessity
  • Tuition
  • Living costs
  • Employability
  • Work experience
  • Under pressure
  • Mismanagement
  • Time-management
  • Academic pursuits
  • Flexible part-time study
  • Financial aid
  • Scholarships
  • Bursaries
  • Collaboration
  • Integrated programs
  • Education
  • Work-life balance
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