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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that teenagers should be in mandatory to do voluntary
work
 in their spare time in order to promote the local community and they think
this
 would be beneficial for both the individual teenager and society.
However
, I disagree that we should force youngsters to do unpaid
work
due to
 some reasons.
To begin
 with, youngsters have to face an enormous amount of
homework
 at school and they may get higher pressure for their daily activities. Just imagine that
students
 will be given lots of
work
 to do after school, so if
students
 are obligated to do unpaid activities, they will not have enough time to complete that assignment.
As a consequence
, they would get worse and worse day by day because of not absolutely finishing
homework
 as doing
homework
 which is the main key to success.
For instance
, the school’s curriculum includes more than ten subjects with lots of
homework
 for each of the subjects and twenty examinations during two semesters to check
students
’ knowledge.
Therefore
, all
students
 are demanded to complete
homework
 and sit on many exams so high pressure is inevitable. After that, we blindly force teenagers to do charity
work
 but not look
further
 into any potential problems. In my point of view, doing voluntary activities with no experience can result in dangerous situations.
For example
,
students
 who take part in medical voluntary must be required to have at least some knowledge about
this
 aspect,
such
 as artificial respiration or basic healthcare method, etc. So working any type of
work
 without knowledge will make things worse.
Overall
, teenagers may choose to
work
 for free and help others, but in my opinion, we should not make
this
 compulsory.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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