Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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Since technology has become a crucial part of
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people
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lives, the majority of
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youngests
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their time on
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technology even from their early childhood. Some
people
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believe using devices for a long time brings health distributions to a child,
whereas
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others tend to think that the earlier child is involved
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new developments-the more knowledge
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will receive.
This
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essay shall delve into both views and give an exact conclusion. First of all, our world is, today, becoming more and more complex, and the impact of developments increases from day to day. In order to adapt to
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alterations, some parents introduce their children to the devices and modern life. It is
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that if the children
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well prepared
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the danger and downward effects on their health, there will be only benefits that children will take with their fresh head.
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,
the
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UK researchers
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revealed that young
people
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are likely to get the information more
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than the
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, early
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to internet
people
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will be more acknowledged as
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person in their future lives.
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, it cannot be denied that computers and phones have
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a very undermining effect
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on their healthiness caused by overuse or wrong way of use. It can bring either
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with mental health or
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physical issues depending,
for instance
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, on the content watched or time spent on, relatively.
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Australian studies show that about 70% of young
people
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now
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a
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stress, depression and several body disorders,
such
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back, weak vision and others. Studies say that conscious problems
often
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related
with
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videogames
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video games

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, which are in general stressful and attention-required,
as well as
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body illnesses either. In conclusion, taking both points of view, it can be obvious that there is a
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of problems in using the internet from
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early age, and
advantages
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do not
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disadvantages
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of using devices, parents should encourage their kids to read books, play
toys
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or just be in
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society. I can surely say that it will have more
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effects on the offspring.

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