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Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

#children #computers #age #hours
Since technology has become a crucial part of
people
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 lives, the majority of
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the youngests
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youngests
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youngsters
spends
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 their time on
newest
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 technology even from their early childhood. Some
people
 believe using devices for a long time brings health distributions to a child,
whereas
 others tend to think that the earlier child is involved
into
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 new developments-the more knowledge
child
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the child
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 will receive.
This
 essay shall delve into both views and give an exact conclusion. First of all, our world is, today, becoming more and more complex, and the impact of developments increases from day to day. In order to adapt to
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 alterations, some parents introduce their children to the devices and modern life. It is
undoubtable
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undoubtedly
 that if the children
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 well prepared
to
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 the danger and downward effects on their health, there will be only benefits that children will take with their fresh head.
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,
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UK researchers
has
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 revealed that young
people
 are likely to get the information more
effective
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 than the
oldests
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oldest
.
Consequently
, early
familirized
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familiarized
 to internet
people
 will be more acknowledged as
succesful
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successful
 person in their future lives.
On the other hand
, it cannot be denied that computers and phones have
a very undermining effects
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 on their healthiness caused by overuse or wrong way of use. It can bring either
problems
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 with mental health or
body's
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 physical issues depending,
for instance
, on the content watched or time spent on, relatively.
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Australian studies show that about 70% of young
people
 now
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a
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stress, depression and several body disorders,
such
 as
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 back, weak vision and others. Studies say that conscious problems
often
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 related
with
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videogames
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video games
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, which are in general stressful and attention-required,
as well as
 body illnesses either. In conclusion, taking both points of view, it can be obvious that there is a
quantity
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 of problems in using the internet from
the
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 early age, and
advantages
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 do not
outweight
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outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.
Instead
 of using devices, parents should encourage their kids to read books, play
toys
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 or just be in
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society. I can surely say that it will have more
pleasent
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pleasant
 effects on the offspring.
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