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With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

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It is no longer a surprise that most animal varieties have lost their homes and some are endangered of their
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 the cutting down of trees, urban development, and the unauthorized killing of
animals
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While
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 the aforementioned factors are important for national development, I opine that there is a need to safeguard
animals
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'
lives
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 as
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 will improve our horizon about nature.
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lives
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 could be protected.
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 with, In order to protect the animal ecosystem and their
lives
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, there is a need for government to set up a policy against illegal hunting or unauthorized deforestation.
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 simply means introducing some punitive measures against
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 acts. An example is the "Land Use Act" introduced by the Nigerian government to punish those who engage in the illegal killing of
animals
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 or cutting down of trees. Individuals are warned through various means
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 as TV programs, social media
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platforms
, and national dailies on the consequence of breaching laid out rules.
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, there is a need to sensitise people against
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 activities which could be detrimental to animal
lives
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 on the effects our activities could have on
animals
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. An example is a popular TV program called "Nat Geo Wild" which educates people on the importance of different animal species and how they can be protected.
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 programs, help people to appreciate nature, thereby improving their horizons. In conclusion, considering all human activities which have endangered animal
ecosystem
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as well as
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lives
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, It is vital to guide
animal
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animals
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 natural
habitat
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habitats
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hence
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, their
lives
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 can be accomplished through appropriate governmental policy and sensitization programs.
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