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The table and pie chart illustrate populations in Australia according to different nationalities and areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and pie chart illustrate populations in Australia according to different nationalities and areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the pie chart provided reveals the proportion of individuals from different nationalities,
while
 supplied table depicts the percentages of urban and countryside citizens in Australia.
Overall
,
according to
 the pie chart given
it is clear that
 the largest sector of
population
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the population
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is belonged
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belongs
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 to natives,
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while
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however
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 the minority of fraction is noticed in Dutch. It is noticeable from the table that
Chinese
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the Chinese
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 are urbanized mostly and at the same time, they make up the lowest proportion of people living in
rural
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a rural
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area
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. Turning to the pie chart,
it
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illustrates the populace of Australia,
British
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the British
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, New
Zealander
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Zealanders
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, Chinese, Dutch and others. 73% which is the biggest amount among others is registered in Australians. The next hugest sectors are seen in British and other nationalities, attracting 7% and 14% respectively.
Furthermore
, the population of the country in Australia which hit the bottom is Dutch and registered as 1%.
On the other hand
,
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the Chinese
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 make up the majority of humans who are living in
urban
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an urban
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 area and only
a
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one hundredth
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 of them
lives
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 in villages. Natives are
on
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at
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 the top of the list of rural
habitants
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habitats
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by
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indicating 20%. Via presenting 90%,
New
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of New
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 Zealanders are onwards
of
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residents who live in metropolises.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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