A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/ unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter: * explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum * describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful * give details of when you would be available for work
Dear Sir or Madam,
I writing
this
letter to you because I found in our local shop your advertisement for a voluntary job such
as security or waiter. My name is Kim and I cover the local community and protect businesses in our suburb. Due to
this
situation, I would like to support by
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me
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this
problem.
Furthermore
, I am definitely able to help you for free, because my family and I visit museums several times during the year. Additionally
, in my past experience, I worked during the night and it was not a problem for me to take part in an overnight job. For example
, if I take a security job through the night it might reduce pressure on you.
At this
moment I work in my main employment from Monday to Thursday, the best option for me,
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start work on Friday night and till Sunday morning. Correct your spelling
I can
This
is what I can provide to you at the moment.
I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
KimSubmitted by vladislavikonnikov112 on
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task achievement
To improve the task response, be more specific about your interest in the museum itself, rather than focusing mainly on your availability and past job experiences.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single clear idea to improve clarity and coherence. Try to avoid mixing multiple points within the same paragraph.
greeting and closing
You have used an appropriate greeting and closing, which adds to the formal tone of the letter.
task achievement
You mentioned your availability clearly and provided specific days and times you could work, which is very helpful.