Some people say that schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the Internet, and they can study just as well at home

The World is getting
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advance
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day by day. People used to
study
in
schools
and universities
however
it is being shifted to online classes with the help of the internet and all material is available online for easy access.
While
some people think it is not a positive development, I think it is a great opportunity for everyone to
study
.
Schools
are important for giving
education
to children. Internet is making it easy and cheap to access a higher level of
education
from home
whereas
schools
are so expensive to afford
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most
of
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the
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people as more than half of the population is living below the poverty line.
Furthermore
, there
is
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a lot of courses that are available online from the world's known
schools
and universities and admission fees are way less than the institute in the local area. The internet can replace
schools
online. Local
schools
need to have a lot of highly educated teachers in almost all areas of the
education
stream as all kids do not have the same interest. Some of the learners are not able to get higher
education
in addition
to not having the subject in the local
schools
and it is expensive to travel far away from home every day. As the result, online
study
is preferred by most children nowadays. In conclusion, as the world is changing in all kinds of ways, the old system of
education
like
schools
are needed to change
as well as
it is not cheap and
not
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have the properly educated teachers to provide
study
in all streams.

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