Many people are afraid to leave their homes because of their fear of crime. Some people believe that more actions should be taken to prevent crime, but others feel that little can be done. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In our thriving economic democracy, a multitude of citizens are scared of going out of their homes for the reason of becoming victims of
crime
and many countries today are grappling with the best ways to curb rising
crime
rates.
Although
some
people
think that there is little that can be done to reduce the levels of
crime
, I believe there are several rationales to tackle
this
serious issue. On the one hand,
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that some solutions were applied,
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proportion of
crime
rate did not change.
To begin
with, the
government
does not provide enough
police
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dedicated to
ensure
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the security of the inhabitant.
For example
, in India, a third of
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involved in the actual work of a
police
officer,
while
the rest of the
police
do security services for politicians and senior officials.
Consequently
, there is a situation of theft of property and vehicles in public places on the street.
Moreover
, the achievements from economic growth and development are not distributed fairly and equally to everyone in society.
As a result
, it is obvious that the
crime
rate is
increasingly
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, especially
juvenile
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delinquent
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delinquents
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when there are frequent robberies, murders and robberies.
However
, from my point of view, there are solutions that will ensure
people
feel safer outside their homes.
Firstly
, the
government
needs to increase
more
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police
patrols on the streets to prevent the rate of criminal
crime
. To be more specific, if criminals or those with malicious
intents
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witness
police
force patrolling in public places days and nights, they are more likely to be deterred from committing crimes
due to
the fear of immediate
police
arrest.
As a result
, rates of crimes would drop significantly.
Secondly
, the
government
should include capital punishment in the law system as it will create
a
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fear among
the
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criminals and
also
prevent crimes.
For instance
, President Donald Trump has imposed the death penalty
for
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all violent criminals.
Besides
, the
government
should create more job opportunities for the poor
people
, because it will narrow the gap between the rich and the poor not completely but is a solution to reduce levels of
crime
. In conclusion,
although
there will be many
behaviors
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that make
people
afraid to leave their
home
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homes
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, I believe that the
government
will take strict measures and laws against those who break the law.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • - Deterrent: something that discourages or is intended to discourage someone from doing something.
  • - Vigilant: keeping careful watch for possible danger or difficulties.
  • - Surveillance: close observation, especially of a suspected spy or criminal.
  • - Community-oriented programs: initiatives that target specific issues within a community.
  • - High-crime areas: neighborhoods or regions where crime rates are significantly elevated.
  • - Social inequality: the existence of unequal opportunities and rewards for different social positions within a society.
  • - Law enforcement: government officials responsible for maintaining public order and enforcing laws.
  • - Cynicism: an inclination to believe that people are motivated purely by self-interest; skepticism.
  • - Pessimism: a tendency to see the worst aspect of things or believe that the worst will happen.
  • - Bureaucratic hurdles: obstacles related to the procedures and regulations in bureaucracies that create inefficiencies.
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