Some people think that space exploration can benefit humans in many aspects. Others think that it has many drawbacks. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Today, there is an argument between
people
who believe that exploring places that are placed outside of the earth
's atmosphere
would have a lot
of advantages while
others think that this
exploration's disadvantages outweigh its benefits
. This
essay will argue that finding other galaxies for living is one of the benefits
of travelling to outer space
which has more benefits
than do not explore there.
On the one hand, these days the vast majority of individuals in different societies think that having a trip to another galaxies would be useful not only for human beings but also
for humans' future. Since the earth
has been struggling with climate change as well as
increasing the general temperature, societies need to find a place on other planets
where they can build their new houses. As a result
, a lot
of useful information will be collected by cutting-edge telescopes but also
by using this
knowledge, people
can find a place that is
exactly like Earth
for future living. For instance
, the James Webb telescope was launched to collect data from different planets
in 2019.
On the other hand
, some other people
believe that having travel outside the earth
's atmosphere
would be harmful. The footprint of space
garbage outside of the earth
's atmosphere
has increased in the last
decade because of huge human-made instruments that have been launched into space
and this
rubbish would have a negative effect on the Milky Way and other planets
. However
, by improving technology in recent years, a lot
of outer space
instruments have been constructed from disposable materials, so the rate of space
garbage will be decreased. For instance
, the last
shuttle that was built by NASA was constructed by titanium which does not have a negative effect on the atmosphere
.
In conclusion, these days some people
believe that space
exploration will have a lot
of benefits
while
others have the opposite prospect. This
essay argues that space
exploration will create an opportunity to find a new place for people
to live on other planets
and improving the technology will reduce the production of space
garbage.Submitted by ramtin.n1374 on
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task achievement
Try to maintain a clear and consistent argument throughout your essay without contradicting your stance. Provide a balanced discussion of both views before clearly stating your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Enhance your coherence by explicitly linking your ideas and paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices. This will make your argument flow more naturally.
coherence cohesion
Incorporate a wider variety of sentence structures to enhance readability and clarity of your arguments.
task achievement
Ensure your examples are clearly linked to the points you're making, reinforcing your arguments effectively.
introspection
You effectively introduced and concluded your essay, presenting your stance clearly.
task achievement
Provided relevant examples to support your arguments, strengthening your essay.
task achievement
Successfully addressed both views on space exploration, demonstrating an understanding of the topic.
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