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The charts show the number of people using the Internet from 1995 to 2002 and Internet users in the world in 2003.

The charts show the number of people using the Internet from 1995 to 2002 and Internet users in the world in 2003.
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The two graphs compare the number of online
users
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 of the
internet
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 from around the world between 1995 and 2002, and
internet
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users
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 in 2003.
It is clear that
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 in Chart 1 the number of online
people
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 rose steadily throughout the period.
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 in Chart 2 the proportion of
internet
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users
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 from the USA and Canada constituted the highest figure. In 1995, just over 20
million
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people
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 used the
Internet
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. The figure had
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of
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1999, from 195
million
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 to 451
million
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people
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 online worldwide.
At the end
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 of the period, the trend accounted for 580
million
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users
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. Meanwhile, in 2003 the
internet
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users
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 from the USA and Canada were just over 50%, compared to 1% of
people
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 using the
internet
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 from the Middle East and Africa.
In addition
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, the proportion of European
users
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 of the
internet
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 accounted for 24% in a given year.
Whereas
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, the percentage of
people
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 from around the world who use the
Internet
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 constituted 15% and 6% in Asia and South America respectively in the year 2003.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words users, internet, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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