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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Taking risks by the masses in their work
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 and internal
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 is prominent for their growth ,
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 balance should be required in folks'
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 essay will elaborate merits and demerits of the same in the ensuing paragraphs. One school of thought, in the present scenario
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 the cut-throat competition every humankind have to do adventure tasks for
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survival of human being.There are a plethora of benefits of taking extreme things
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, it helps to improve people's lifestyles.,
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 they become more stronger and confident .,
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 the masses get diverse rewards in their career
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 namely in terms of promotion, incentives and free holidays if they do some adventurous activities and
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 the organisation gets desired or above the margin ,particularly those divisions.
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 , if communities do some extra and extreme activities
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 they get incentives in the kind of money or sometimes in terms of honourable position , self-satisfaction and some funds which provide them luxurious lifestyle.
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, there are adverse effects to taking likelihood in both personal
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 work
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. Sometimes risk takes in a dangerous way to cite an example doing exgratia work at the workplace that they are deprived of their fun and happy
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 and go into depression and stressful life
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 they run behind the materialistic approach ,
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 they cannot both the
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 and start getting confused and feel lonely in a huge world.
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, the crowd becomes a machine that runs for wealth and fame
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 that they forgot their original existence.
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 , every people aspire to do something pro mount in their
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 but that has benefits and drawbacks if society takes risks in the appropriate manner
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 gets good return and balances their
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 on both sides like coins.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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