Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Spending funds on transportation pathways is a topic of discussion. I strongly disagree that the government should put
money
for
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into
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railways
instead
of
roads
. The first reason is
about
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people who always prefer to go anywhere by their own vehicle because they work hard to collect their salaries with the aim of purchasing a
car
to live more
easy
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easily
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.
For instance
, a person who has a good quality
car
, like to go on a trip
by
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in
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their own
car
to be more comfortable and do whatever they want.
Hence
, the officials should collect the
money
and spend it
for
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on
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ways to make good
roads
due to
their
citizens
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citizen's
citizens'
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commute
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commuting
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better. The second one would be about the ticket prices
due to
expenses
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the expenses
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that train and
railways
have, the tickets are usually expensive. In
this
case, people tend to go anywhere
by
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in
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their own
car
.
For example
, individuals prefer to go on a trip by
car
as the tickets
are cost
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cost
have cost
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a leg and
arm
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an arm
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.
Moreover
,
trip
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the trip
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is always expensive because the members should spend a lot of
money
on accommodation, food, souvenir and so on, so they prefer to cut back on other transport and stick to road transport like their own
car
and bus. So, the ticket prices are not reasonable and it is better to put that
money
on
road
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the road
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and
construction
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the construction
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of good trails. Some may argue that
,
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the authorities need to spend
money
on
railways
because it is a safe way to protect
inhabitant
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inhabitants
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;
however
,
whit
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what
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good quality
roads
and good drivers, everyone will be safe. In conclusion, I strongly disagree that the government should spend
money
on
railways
because of two reasons, one is about preferences of the society to go anywhere by their
car
and the second is about the expensive tickets that the trains
has
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have
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whereas
some people think that it is a safe way but we can monitor it by good
roads
and drivers.
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