It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with is opinion. What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviours to children?

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Punishment
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makes the
child
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realize the outcome of his or her actions. It is debated that it is necessary to punish children in order to teach them right and wrong
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some people think that it is totally insane to get harsh§ with your own kid.
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my opinion, I personally think that
punishment
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is necessary for a better upbringing of your baby. On one hand, It is suggested that accusing a kid of his mistakes makes him more stubborn and stiff.
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, it has been observed that those teenagers who were beaten or got punished by their
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in their early childhood are less respectful and more reluctant to listen to what their
parents
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want from them. Rather, they prefer to follow what their friends do. So, in
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way, those
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lose the connection or bonding from their offspring.` On the other side,It has been preferred, that in order to teach a
child
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,reward and
punishment
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, are important.
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, if a
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does something wrong or makes any monetary loss he should be made to pay for it.In
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way ,It will help him in future to stay away from
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big losses the
punishment
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should be set
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the
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's age.Neither it should be too lenient that it puts no impact on a
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's behaviour nor it should be too harsh that it may disturb a
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's mental health.
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,it should be safe for a kid's health and well-being and
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gives him a good lesson. In conclusion,
parents
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can train their children by rewarding and punishing them for their deeds but it should be kept in mind to build a strong connection and a good friendship with them.
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