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Band 4

The map shows how one park has changed since 1980.

The map shows how one park has changed since 1980.
The developments which happened to
a
Correct article usage
the
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park
Use synonyms
, which is seen present when compared to its
appearence
Correct your spelling
appearance
 in 1980 are represented in the given map.
Overall
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 ,
it is clear that
Linking Words
 the
park
Use synonyms
 has a more appealing
Correct your spelling
appearance
appearence
Correct your spelling
appearance
 now
that
Correct word choice
than
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 it was in the past In 1980 the main attractions of the
park
Use synonyms
 were
Use synonyms
pond
Add an article
a pond
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, the gate sited northwest and two flower
garden
Fix the agreement mistake
gardens
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 located
both
Change preposition
on both
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left
Correct article usage
the left
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 and right
side
Fix the agreement mistake
sides
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of
gate
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the gate
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. There were three benches around the
pond
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, if
Add an article
a tourist
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tourist
Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
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 came to
Use synonyms
pond
Add an article
a pond
the pond
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,they used
to
Fix the infinitive
apply
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sit . On the northeast of the
park
Use synonyms
Add a comma
,
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there were three big trees Presently the
park
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 opened four sides way for
acces
Correct your spelling
access
. the
park
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 became
Change the article
a
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great deal of the news . One of
Linking Words
this
Correct pronoun usage
these
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 is
bush
Correct article usage
the bush
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 ,
Instead
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 of
the
Correct article usage
apply
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flowers
a
Change the article
an
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existed
Wrong verb form
existing
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 bush .
Another flowers
Replace the adjective
Another flower
Other flowers
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intead
Correct your spelling
instead
 built
play ground
Correct your spelling
playground
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 for children and
also
Linking Words
 next to the
pond
Use synonyms
 constructed one seat for
tourist
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tourists
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.
Finally
Linking Words
 , in 1980 had only 3 trees and come now other things added including chairs, desks and
barbecue
Correct article usage
a barbecue
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, pond with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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