Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion You should write at least 250 words.

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is no doubt these days that individuals
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the world became nome recognize their rights. The question is , why do groups of people consider the government better to forbid extreme sports
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other nations think the opportunity must be given to the citizens to select their choices? In
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I would draw my own opinion. In terms of ,freedom the main reason given to support the claim is that
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any human they have the right to play any kind
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activity or do whatever they want to do except, that behaviours or actions may have a negative effect or harmful sequences on other people or environment.
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, a regulated sport with strict principles will enhance people's safety, to be more specific, the limitation
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used in dangerous
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as the athlete's age and health condition.
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some sports that may harmful to the environment , so they must consider taking suitable action to reduce the damage
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use vehicles
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as car select the location the of
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naturally friendly (electric car ). In conclusion ,
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humans think the governments must reject the ha better to have their opportunities to select sport
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • severe injuries
  • fatalities
  • base jumping
  • bull running
  • extreme skiing
  • safeguard
  • well-being
  • regulating
  • avoidable harm
  • healthcare costs
  • burdening
  • personal freedom
  • autonomy
  • training
  • equipment
  • mitigated
  • personal satisfaction
  • mental health benefits
  • resilience
  • adventure
  • assess risks
  • public safety
  • unnecessary healthcare costs
  • outright bans
  • balanced approach
  • stringent safety standards
  • mandatory training sessions
  • adequately informed
  • safeguarding
  • public health
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