The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her Say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party Explain why you won't be able to attend the party Give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time

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Dear uncle, I hope you are in pink

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and in

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health. I got

happy

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a happy

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shock after hearing the news of

birthday

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the birthday

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celebration of Chris in India. Undoubtedly, Chris will be on cloud nine by celebrating his birthday because he will get

chance

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to meet all his childhood friends,

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,he will

recieve

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receive

blessings

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of their

grand parents

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. I am really desperate that, I won't be able to attend the birthday event ,as I have to go to Ahmedabad to get done my biometrics.

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, I have emailed them

give

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another appointment,

but

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they have refused it.

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, I have no choice other than be present on

same

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day .

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, once I get back

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home after that,I will take him out and we will

rome

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come

around the places, where we used to play in

the

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college days. I am sure he will

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over the moon .

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, I want

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to keep confidential.

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, don't share the plan with him. My apologies for not being there on

special

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day of Chris.Give my kind regards to

aunty

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. Yours sincerely Zarna Dobariya.

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

185 words

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The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her Say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party Explain why you won't be able to attend the party Give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

In the future it may be necessary for us to live on other planets. For this reason, some people believe that we should spend money now researching planets that could be a possible home, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As the result of tourisms and the incresing number of people traveling, there's an growing demand for more flights. What problems does it have on the enviroment? What measures could be taken to solve the problem?

If old people are no longer physically, mentally or financially able to look after themselves, younger family members should be legally responsible for supporting them.