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demand for food is increasing worldwide. whats the cause of this? what measures can the international community take to meet these demands?

#demand #food #whats #measures #community #demands
One of the predictable menace
problem
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 for the future is scarcity. And
statictics
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statistics
 show that year by year demand for meals is rising. There are some reasons behind
this
 huge global problem that
threated
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threatens
threaten
threatened
 our planet. Primarily the significant
developing
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 of
the
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medicine caused
of
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the longevity of humanity.
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, the latest
statictics
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statistics
 show that
average
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 life span
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are increase
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 to 65 years
respectivily
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respectively
to
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for
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male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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. On the one
hand
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 it is
good
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change
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 for people but
on the other
hand
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 it can create
big
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 difference between borns and deaths. There
are
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 some
experience
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experiences
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 in the big countries as
a
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Chine about
abonding
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abounding
bonding
 of
the
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birth.
Government
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forbidded
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forbids
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families
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from having
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having
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 more than one child. The big countries who have a lot of
populitian
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population
 can experiment
this
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 method
on
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 their community. Secondarily, wastage of food
specially
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 in
the
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metropolitian
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metropolitan
 cities is increased by the amount of
more
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resteraunts
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restaurants
, hotels, shopping malls
and
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etc.
Although
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by
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 the
positivily
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positively
positive
 side.
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to
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a to
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solution
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the solution
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of
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decreasing
waste
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the waste
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 of meals and water as a
reduce
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reduced
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 amount of
abovemnetioned
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abovementioned
 places can help to protect from
the
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scarcity. In conclusion,
controling
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controlling
 of birth and
protect
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to
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against
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 wastage can help
of
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the
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meet
such
 a problem as a lack of
foods
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food
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.
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