A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays,social level and personal
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become the judgement of a
person
's worth without considering of those
charactors
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characters
such
as honour, kindness and trust.
However
,what
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the most important value for a
person
.
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In my point of view, the traditional way to evaluate people is much more acceptable and important. First,as an
indivisual
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individual
,trust and
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is the baseline when establishing
relationship
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with other people.
This
is because no one
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to be cheated,it is absolutely the top hurt in friendship.If a
person
always
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with
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others, how can we judge his worth,it is impossible to know the truth of his work. Take an
athtele
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athlete
for example
,no matter how many medals he got,once he
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in the match,all his achievement will be
cancalled
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cancelled
, no matter how great and important he is.
Moreover
,kindness is
also
one of the basic
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of a
person
.If someone can treat other things
nice
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, it is called a kind of
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in previous value.It is because
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this
in mind is important for a
person
to remind himself all the time not to do anything harmful,which is not only with his friends but
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society.
This
is not to say material possessions and social status are not valuable.
First,a
person
without a right world outlook
nealy
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really
hard to get
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success.Of course,with more money and power,
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man can do much more things
to
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the
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sociaty
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society
,even the world,
such
as donating to
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the
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charity or investing more
on
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education. In sum, it is important not to forget the value taught by the elders in the past.It is wise and useful in a human's life.But it is not an
oppsite
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opposite
to earn money.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social status
  • material possessions
  • old-fashioned values
  • honour
  • kindness
  • trust
  • empathy
  • media influence
  • self-worth
  • metrics of success
  • financial achievements
  • community contributions
  • superficial connections
  • emotional bonds
  • life satisfaction
  • stress and anxiety
  • policy changes
  • community programs
  • restoring balance
  • personal character
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