A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays,social level and personal

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become the judgement of a

person

's worth without considering of those

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characters

such

as honour, kindness and trust.

However

,what

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the most important value for a

person

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In my point of view, the traditional way to evaluate people is much more acceptable and important. First,as an

indivisual

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individual

,trust and

believe

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is the baseline when establishing

relationship

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with other people.

This

is because no one

want

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to be cheated,it is absolutely the top hurt in friendship.If a

person

always

cheat

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with

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others, how can we judge his worth,it is impossible to know the truth of his work. Take an

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athlete

for example

,no matter how many medals he got,once he

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in the match,all his achievement will be

cancalled

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cancelled

, no matter how great and important he is.

Moreover

,kindness is

also

one of the basic

skill

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of a

person

.If someone can treat other things

nice

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, it is called a kind of

out of home-education

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in previous value.It is because

keep

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this

in mind is important for a

person

to remind himself all the time not to do anything harmful,which is not only with his friends but

also

for

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society.

This

is not to say material possessions and social status are not valuable.

First,a

person

without a right world outlook

nealy

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really

hard to get

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success.Of course,with more money and power,

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man can do much more things

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the

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sociaty

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society

,even the world,

such

as donating to

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the

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charity or investing more

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education. In sum, it is important not to forget the value taught by the elders in the past.It is wise and useful in a human's life.But it is not an

oppsite

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opposite

to earn money.

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