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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and to make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and to make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented line graph illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of shops that
closet
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close
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 and open in one nation between two time periods. From an
overall
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 perspective, as can be seen from the graph, two categories experienced
increase
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an increase
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 and decrease indicators during the period. The number of openings sharply declined between 2011 and 2012, from around 8,500 shops to nearly 4000. In the wake
of
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thisof
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, the line graph depicts the process of growth until 2014
and
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which
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reached
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reaching
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 approximately 6000 shopping markets.
Next
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consequently
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 the points of openings dropped in 2015
,
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apply
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 and remained steady until 2017 with 4000 markets. Ultimately,
at the end
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 of the period shows 3000 shopping
centers
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centres
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. In terms of the
trends
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,trends
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 closures did not amend like an opening until 2014 around 6500 shopping areas. Between 2014 and 2015 experienced
extreme
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an extreme
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 decline from, 6500 to 500 shopping zones. In spite
of
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thisof
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, in the short period sharply inclined to 5000 the numbers of shops.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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