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In some countries, governemtn safety laws include things such as wearing a hard hat on a building site or wearing safety clothes in certain factories. To what extent are laws of this kind a good idea? What sort of safety law would you introduce, if you were given a chance?

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In several nations’
safety
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laws
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, it is compulsory to wear a
safety
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 helmet on a project under construction or wear
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 clothes when working in
a particular manufactories
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particular manufactories
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. From my perspective, It is completely a necessary policy and if I have the authority, I will impose some
laws
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 which could secure labour
safety
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. There are two fundamental reasons why
safety
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laws
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 ought to be executed. One of the main causes is that these
laws
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 can minimize the rate of labour
accidents
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 considerably. A number of works have the extent of danger significantly higher than others so they need to be protected cautiously.
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,
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 in nuclear power factories are always at risk of radiation exposure that leads to cancer and disability in the next generations.
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,workers are forced to wear special clothing. The other reason is that the
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 law partly represents the care and prestige of the government with
employees
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. If a country has a huge figure for cases of injury or death yearly owing to labour
accidents
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, its image will be seriously affected and be considered a hazardous nation. Supposing that I have the power to adjust
safety
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laws
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, I will require employers to train their workers carefully before allowing them to
work
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 with dangerous machines or in harmful environments. In fact, In Vietnam, almost all dangerous
work
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 is still conducted by people but most of the workers do not have sufficient knowledge and skills so
accidents
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 easily happen.
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, training plays a vital role to defend
employees
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 from mischance. What is more, strict punishments must be applied to manufacturers who oblige
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 to
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 more than 8 hours a day.
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 people working too much can neglect their
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 and make mistakes more frequently, which easily
cause
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 industrial
accidents
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. For that reason, working hours have to be controlled precisely. In conclusion, there is no doubt that the
safety
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 law system has to be carried out strictly.
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, heavy punishments for violators and cautious training are extremely essential

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