These days consumers are faced with an increasing amount of advertising from various company. To what extent do you think consumers are infuenced by advertising?What measures should be taken to prevent them?

Advertising is the main method for companies to attract
consumers
and increase profits and from my
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understanding
this
method is not showing any signs of slowing down. I think the general
consumers
nowadays are heavily influenced and
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negative impacts. There are actions
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to be taken
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consideration to prevent
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further
disadvantages. There are many ways advertising can influence
consumers
either through social media
as well as
visual displays in our daily lives. Whenever we go to Youtube or
facebook
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, there is always a pop
ups
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screan
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screen
showing many advertising information. It could be ranged from workout plans or special products. We are advertised heavily through
high tech
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devices.
In addition
, there is
also
visual impact
such
as the billboard we saw when we
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, or the big posters on the walls of our local store.
As a result
, advertising is
influecing
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influencing
consumers
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consumers'
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decision
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decisions
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and judgement. One way to prevent
such
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is to have the help of government interventions and regulations. Government should put out new regulations on how much advertising every company is allowed to spend. By limiting
advertising
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the advertising
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budget, the great society should have less impact.
Secondly
, every
consumers
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should
also
take actions to limit themself from using social media or
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devices. Limiting your time on computers or phones is good not only for filtering our heavy commercials but
also
good for our health. In conclusion,
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company is always inventing ways to
advertising
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consumers
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. In order to prevent heavy influence, both government and
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individuals
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should take
actions
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manipulative tactics
  • Consumer behavior
  • Emotional appeal
  • Celebrity endorsement
  • Subliminal messaging
  • Omnipresent advertising
  • Informed decision-making
  • Deceptive practices
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ad-blocking technology
  • Targeted advertising
  • Ethical marketing
  • Brand awareness
  • Consumer protection laws
  • Buying habits
  • Media literacy
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • False advertising
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