The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000

The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000
The line chart gives information about
China
and the USA in terms of the
birth
rates from 1920 to 2000.
Overall
, the
birth
rates of the two countries both experienced a general decreasing trend during the period given, after suffering several fluctuations. In 1920, the new
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born
baby accounted
10
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%
for
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the whole population in
China
, with a
negilible
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negligible
gap towards the figure for
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(11%). During the following 20
years
, the
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birth
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birth
brith
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birth
rates showed a similar
trendancy
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tendency
, rising slightly by 1.5% and falling to the primitive figure. From 1930 to 1945, the
birth
rate
of
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China
witnessed a sharp increase, which was followed by a dramatic decline to 5%, before keeping stable at
this
level for 5
years
.
By contrast
, the equivalent of the USA suffered a relatively small change between 1930 and 1940, after which it decreased dramatically to less than 5%. During the
last
55
years
, the proportion of
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babies
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in
Chinese
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population saw an extreme
rising
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to the summit (20%), with an
according
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sharp drop to 9%, followed by a more gentle
falling
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to 2.5% in 2000. The
birth
rate
of
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in
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the USA
also
reached
the
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peak
at
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in
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1950, but with a slower speed of falling, it surpassed that of
China
in 1955 and remained
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5% advantage for the following
years
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, birth, years with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • demographics
  • population control policy
  • One-Child Policy
  • Baby Boom
  • fertility rate
  • census data
  • fluctuations
  • societal norms
  • economic prosperity
  • Great Leap Forward
  • family planning
  • contraception
  • workforce participation
  • aging population
  • urbanization
  • trend analysis
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