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The table in the above image shows the source of money for the police budget. The chart shows how it was spent. Both of these images capture data from the year 2017 to 2018.

The table in the above image shows the source of money for the police budget. The chart shows how it was spent. Both of these images capture data from the year 2017 to 2018.
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The provided table illustrates the information on the police
budget
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's source of
money
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,
while
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 the two pie charts below give data on how the
money
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 was spent from 2017 to 2018.
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, as we can see, the support of the
money
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 mostly came from the national government and the
money
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 was greatly used for paying the officers and staff during that period.
To begin
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 with, it is obvious that the total
budget
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 slightly increased over a year. The main source for the police
budget
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 was from the national government for all time, even reaching 177.8 million Euro in 2018. The local taxes support for the police
budget
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 showed the most change, increasing by over 10 million Euro. The
money
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 from other sources
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 as grants had the lowest increase, 0.5 million Euro.
According to
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 the diagrams, the
money
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 was mainly spent on salaries in the two years, but the percentage of
money
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 used for salaries in 2018 decreased by 6% in the comparison with the number in the year 2017.
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, the amount of
money
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 used for buildings and transport remained constant, at 17%.
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 but not least, the investment in technology in the year 2018 was nearly double the proportion in 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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