parents should encourage children to spend less time studying and more time in phycial activity.do you agree or disagree?

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encourage
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kids to spend less time
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studying and more pattern
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physical
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essay.
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, education is more important to our children
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future. If they will not
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more time
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study
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they will not achieve what they want in
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life. For
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, if the student
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knowledge they will not take
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dream job.
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,
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activity they can do the same time
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student
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give more attention to education. In conclusion,
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more important than
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physical
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