The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.
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The bar graph illustrates the figures for travellers that used John F. Kennedy, Newark and
LaGuardia
airports in the city of New York from 1995 to 2000.
Overall
, the
users
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of all airports increased noticeably.
While
the number of visitors that used
LaGuardia
saw a significant increase,
other
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the other
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two airports exhibited a small increase between 1995 and 2000.
Through
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the entire period,
LaGuardia
's
value
demonstrated the highest visitors, except the year 1998 which was the only year that John F. Kennedy replaced
LaGuardia
as the dominant airport. Its quantity
starting
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at around 35
million
passengers in 1995, and
then
increased year-over-year
consistantly
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consistently
to approximately 50
million
passengers until 1999. Its
value
drammatically
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dramatically
grew to just below 70
million
passengers
at the end
of the period. In the first three
year
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, the figures for John F. Kennedy
airport
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Airport
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roughly
trippled
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tripled
its
value
from nearly 15
million
people to around 45
million
people.
In addition
to
this
, its
value
hovered at
this
level over the remaining period. ın contrast, Newark's
value
was around 15
million
individuals which steadily inclined to just over 40
million
individuals in 1998, before remaining relatively stable at
this
level over the next two years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words laguardia, value, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant increase
  • highest number
  • steady increase
  • largest growth
  • dramatic
  • slowest growth
  • slight decrease
  • gradual increase
  • period
  • travelers
  • major airports
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