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The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2015 and present day.

The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2015 and present day.
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The given pictures illustrate the differences in the layout of an art gallery’s ground
floor
 from 2015 to current time.
Overall
, it is easy to recognize that there are so many changes in the design of the ground
floor
 with the addition of buildings and
replacement
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the replacement
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 of some positions. Especially, a new ramp for
wheelchair
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wheelchairs
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 and a lift are built to give priority to
disabilities
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disabled
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 people. On the right-hand side of the ground
floor
, the layout remains unchanged in both
size
 and position of the three
exhibition
 rooms, numbering from one to three.
Also
, the
entrance
 is kept in the middle of the South.
In contrast
, the changes occur mainly on
two thirds
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two-thirds
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size
 of the left-hand side of the
floor
. The ramp for
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the wheelchair
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wheelchair
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wheelchairs
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 appears on the left outside, next to the
entrance
.
Besides
, the stairs
was
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were
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 opposite to
entrance
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the entrance
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 in the past,
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but is
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is
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are
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 moved to
left
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the left
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 a little bit now to set the lift between the stairs and
exhibition
 room three.
Moreover
, the
entrance
 hall is
being
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apply
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smaller in
size
 because of
moving
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the moving
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 of
receptionist
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the receptionist
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area
 from
position
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a position
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 near the stairs to the
center
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centre
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 of the
floor
.
Additionally
,
the
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apply
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exhibition
 room four is split into two smaller rooms, namely the temporary
exhibition
 and the children’s
area
. The café
area
 is not only reduced in
size
 but
also
 replaced by the gallery shop.
Finally
, the gallery office is demolished to create an open-plan
area
 with the vending machine next to the gallery shop.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words floor, size, exhibition, entrance, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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