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In some countries younger people are increasingly losing interest in teaching. Why is this happening? What can be done to improve the situation? Give reasons for your answers and include examples from your own experience.

#countries #people #interest #situation #answers
Young individuals in some
country
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 increasingly
loose there
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lose their
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 interest in teaching.
Firstly
, teaching is the key to a good education
to
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for
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 our children. We need to encourage younger people about the
important
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 of education.
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,
high
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a high
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 salary and more benefits to
teacher
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the teacher
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 is the main point to motivate young teachers.
In addition
, we need to establish more
facility
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 and modern technology
to
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 other countries.
Secondly
, we need to improve all
aspect
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aspects
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in
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 teaching and focus
to
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on
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young
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a young
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teacher
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teachers
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. Give them the benefits
for
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 instant free access to
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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give
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and give
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discount
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the discount
a discount
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card
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 to all government facilities. In summary,
government
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the government
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 must focus
to
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 young people
teachers
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and teachers
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 not pay small
salary
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salaries
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. Must give all the benefits
in
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to
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 the same authorities.
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